IELTS Essay # 5 - Some say that parents whose children are breaking the law must be punished in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Essay # 5

Some say that parents whose children are breaking the law must be punished in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


Instances of juvenile delinquency are increasing every day. This gives rise to thinking on whether the parents are to blame and should be punished for this, or should the offender be solely responsible for his acts.


It is a granted belief that an ideal upbringing of a child is the duty of a parent. Therefore, if a child is unruly or ill-mannered, commonly the parents are thought of as not being able to discipline the child. Premising on this, it is totally justified if the parents of a minor are to be punished for the crimes he has committed. However, it doesn't seem morally right.


I think the need for this has risen because the existing methods of rehabilitation or punishment are maybe failing to reform the juvenile into better behaviour. Whatever the case may be, it is wrong to punish someone for the acts they haven't performed. This may only increase the feelings of resentment and ill-will in the society.


Besides, not entirely the parents are responsible if their child commits any crime. Children usually get influenced more by some anti-social content on TV or in movies, bad company, content on the internet, and any such medium which exposes violence. Some researchers have proven that even gory video games are known to influence children to become violent and harbour negativity, eventually resulting into committing serious offences if provoked.


To conclude, I would like to say that it is totally pointless to prove a point to juvenile criminals by punishing their parents. Instead, better penitence procedures should be made effective to mend the broken mindsets of such children and help them turn to a new leaf. (275 words)
IELTS Essay # 5 - Some say that parents whose children are breaking the law must be punished in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? IELTS Essay # 5 - Some say that parents whose children are breaking the law must be punished in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Reviewed by Devanshi on February 11, 2016 Rating: 5

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  1. Juvenile delinquency is one of the wide spoken social phenomena in the world. While, many facts have contributed to this social chaos, certain demographic of the society believes that, punishing of parents whom children are breaking the law could help to mitigate this issue. I completely disagree with this argument, and plausible reasoning will be discussed in depth in following paragraphs.

    Firstly, many incidents of children breaking the law occur mainly due to the lack of proper guidance from parents or elders. Researchers have indicated that 65% of children involved in illegal activities in South East Asia either had no parents or grew in an orphanage. Therefore, punishing of parents will become impossible for children who lost their parents at their early ages and grew up in an orphanage.

    Furthermore, punishing of parents seems pointless and it could ruin the bond and relationship between child and parent. For example, if a parent is fines of $50 for misconduct of his own son, the parent will be annoyed of paying the fine and could provoke him to punish the children severely. This could be even worse for a family living in gutter and has lower income level.

    Similarly, children should be held responsible for their own actions and should be punished by law or parents depending on the nature of the unlawful doing, eventually learning the lesson that every action has its own consequences and he is the only person who has control over that outcome.

    In conclusion, punishing of parents for their children's unlawful actions is completely insensible and morally wrong. It could provoke more feuds between children and parents relationships. Children should be held responsible for their actions and be punished accordingly.

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